My short story collection, Up The Garden Path, is currently free as the final part of Alfie Dog Fiction's fifth birthday celebrations. This offer runs 12th to 16th of July.Get it here.
If you download and enjoy it, I'd really appreciate it if you left a review on Amazon.
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How lovely, thank you, Patsy. And as it's my birthday too today (I'm older than Alfie Dog though I'm afraid) I'll download the short story book as a lovely birthday present. I'm really looking forward to reading it as I'm a huge fan of gardens, gardening and anything whatsoever connected with gardens, so it should be a perfect read for me. Thank you xx
Happy birthday, Lisa.
Hi Patsy,
As an experienced editor and proofreader, I find it impossible to read words without spotting errors and so, rather than leaving a review on Amazon, I though t I would leave it here first, for your consideration of its content.
I am an editor and proofreader of seven years and have been a writer since the very tender age of seven (and was actually published at that age!), though my writing these days tends to be non-fiction articles. I would so love to be able to write short stories and have been on an online course and have also attended a People’s Friend workshop, so you can see I am eager. And, as you have many published stories, I love to read them. So:-
Review:-
‘From the angle of a ‘one day’ writer of short stories, I thoroughly enjoyed Patsy’s collection of garden stories. I found each plot to be very simple and true to life, so it was easy to settle into each one and feel satisfied at the end. However, I did find several errors in the editing and proofreading department which, in short stories, does disappoint me, as finding the errors in a short word count is much easier than finding them in a novel, as less time is involved and one’s mind is in a continual ‘fresh’ state in the time needed.’
That’s totally honest and I would award a 4.
For your benefit, I list some of the errors found here, so that you can correct your Kindle copies:-
Digging for Victory:-
There’s not many youngsters as has a go’ – this could be colloquial.
Until she heard his voice – please look at the use of ‘she’ and a later ‘she’d’, as I would say that they both need to be form the same tense. You may disagree but then, as a proofreader, I would have run this by you.
Dalrymple:-
Goods where offered for sale ……
Nice Weather for It:-
You was lucky to break your hip – possibly colloquial.
Tainted Water:-
They thought they was haunted ….
Watchdog:-
Coming to the boil (punctuation) Katie taking …..
You get off and see to you animals (punctuation) it’s not fair to …..
To offer a suggestion – no full stop.
Strawberry Jam:-
Neither her neighbour or the postmistress ….
I Wonder which method - misplaced capital letter.
I’ve leant my own pan (loaned?):-
verb
past tense: leant; past participle: leant
1. be in or move into a sloping position.
"he leaned back in his chair"
synonyms: slant, incline, bend, tilt, be at an angle, slope, tip, bank, list, heel, careen, cant, bias, veer, sway, angle
"a line of palm trees leaning in the wind"
o incline from the perpendicular and rest for support against (something).
"a man was leaning against the wall"
synonyms: rest, be propped up, recline, be supported
"Polly leaned against the door"
o cause something to rest against.
"he leaned his elbows on the table"
verb
past tense: loaned; past participle: loaned
1. lend (a sum of money or item of property).
"the computer was loaned to us by the theatre"
synonyms: lend, advance, give credit, credit, allow; More
And that’s it.
You’ll either appreciate me for pointing out these errors or you’ll hate me. I do hope it’s the former.
Denise Watson.
denise-watson1@hotmail.com
Thanks for reading and taking the time to leave your comments, Denise. Of course I don't hate you!
Phew! I'm pleased about that. Bye for now.
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